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Randy And Joanie Were Lovers by Shell Presto holly 09/17/2009 01:10 am Dead and Tired Update? please? I'm not dead!! But my old computer is. Sorry about the delays. In the time since the last chapter was posted, I wrote part of a chapter, had my pc die, had to wait until I could buy another, bought one, and had my internet die abruptly after that. Anyway, I do have more of my next chapter written, and within the next few weeks a friend should be able to fish what I had written previously from my old PC. If he can't, I'll just rewrite. But I have NOT given up on this story and I AM finally back online. Sorry for the troubles. 06/27/2009 12:54 pm Dead and Tired Wonderful! I can't wait to see what happens next! Bowling? So that's what it's called. Yeah, sure. LOL! BT_ 06/24/2009 05:04 pm Dead and Tired BOWLING??? You have to be kidding me. This was a beautiful, sexy, lovely chapter. Bowling? calminthechaos 06/23/2009 06:22 am Dead and Tired All I can say is WOW! An amazing chapter, every single word was perfect! Granted, bowling would have been funny, this chapter was just perfect! Sorry it was hell to writer, but you know, you sure know how to write 'em! Hope Spike can grab some 'real' food in the next chapter. These characters are beautiful, and so is your story! *Basks in comments.* No, really, I'm a horribly person and that's the only reason I write, to hear what people think. Really, truly, thanks for the kind words. It makes the hard work worth it. (Though I take well to unkind words, too.) And, oh, we'll deal with the food issue. Just you wait... I think I like this better than bowling, if you can imagine such a thing. Seriously, this is the hottest and most romantic Spuffy sex I've read in quite a while. And bonus: I wasn't expecting it at all. Their amazing psychic powers are so sweet! That, and the dreams make me wonder how stable the spell is, and how much longer until the other shoe drops. Great stuff! Psychic powers? Do I have them knowing each other and themselves that well already?! I may need to re-evaluate.... Seriously, though, bowling is pretty fun. Though I often get something like a 39... Anyway, thank you. I made it a pledge to try to make the sex scenes different and/or memorable and not cookie-cutterish, so the fact that someone found it hot and romantic is very reassuring. (Especially when I was aiming for slightly awkward and off-beat.) I'm also glad it came as a surprise to some, because I try not to telegraph. I want everyone to be surprised and caught off-guard at some point during this fic, be it a sex scene or a memory discovery. I'm really having fun playing with the spell. I thought the dreams were fair game because both Buffy and Spike have had recurring dreams in season six. I saw no reason why their subconscious would stop playing the film even if the theater had changed. Great story and chapter! I hope the bowling will come soon. FYI "Lackadaisical" is my favorite word. It's one of mine, too! And it's so hard to use well in a story, so I hope it pleased. I'm hoping to use slake at some point and I'm debating using moue/mow, but I think that last one might be too distracting because I'm not sure a lot of people know it. I like playing with vocabularly, but hate the idea of breaking the mood by confusing the reader with a new word. So we'll see. And, oh, the pins are lined up. The big question on my plate right now is how much Xander/Anya am I gonna throw in. I don't want to distract from the Spuffy, but it has to be addressed. So we'll see... Eden 06/22/2009 09:38 pm Dead and Tired Well so far this story has me completely hooked. You've managed to have each of the characters be innocent and naive, while still keeping some of their more... persistent characteristics. Chapter 5 is fine as far as sex scenes go, but I do have to wonder if Spike really would've been able to quell the hunger that well. It might also be good to put a warning at the top of that chapter listing it as an intimate scene. Other than that, I'm definitely hooked and eager for more! Can't wait for Chapter 6! Sorry for the lack of a warning. I did think about it, but in the end I thought the entire story is rated NC17, and I really, really hate the idea of telegraphing what will happen in my stories. And in the end I'm glad I did because at least one person besides yourself didn't see it coming, so I felt like I would have ruined the flow of the story by letting people know when it was coming. So in general, you can (but shouldn't) expect anything to happen in any given chapter. Sorry if that's an inconvenience. Thank you for the kind words. I'm always excited when I get people hooked. :) And as for Spike quelling the hunger... he's not critical at this point. I figure, roughly, he didn't eat the night Teeth came after him, so one night hidiing from teeth, the actual night of the Tabula Rasa spell, and now the morning after. I figure he has to be able to go at least one day comfortably without eating, but just like a human he'd be peckish. This is Day 3, so we're getting very uncomfortable. All things considered, though, I know I can skip meals for writing (I often get engrossed and write in 5-hour stints), and I'd hope Buffy is a bit more engrossing for Spike. ;) 06/22/2009 04:39 pm Dead and Tired I don't know if I want Spike to bite Buffy yet or not, but I'm glad he isn't thinking of her as food at all. The way Spike and Buffy were, without knowing their history, in this chapter was great. I liked the insights they got into each other, and the dreams. Great chapter. 06/22/2009 04:39 pm Dead and Tired I don't know if I want Spike to bite Buffy yet or not, but I'm glad he isn't thinking of her as food at all. The way Spike and Buffy were, without knowing their history, in this chapter was great. I liked the insights they got into each other, and the dreams. Great chapter. Thank ye kindly. The fun thing about hunger is it never goes away, it just gets worse, so I hope you'll keep reading. calminthechaos 06/14/2009 03:57 am Outnumbered Another amazing chapter! This one has been my favorite so far, although I did like them shopping and kissing (of course)! Please update soon. This is one of the few stories I check almost daily to see if there is more to it! Great stuff! I"m interested to see how you write Spike approaching the blood issue. And the daylight issue which I'm sure will both occur in the next chapter. Love it!!! Thank ye kindly! I certainly hope I can outdo every chapter. I won't lie, most updates will usually take 3 weeks. (If it seemed more frequent for a while, it was because I had a backlog of chapters while the site was down.) That's 1 to 2 weeks for me to write and 1 week for my beta to get around to reading it. And I have to wonder if you're reading my mind, because I'm fairly sure I didn't foreshadow the daylight issue. But you're spot on, next chapter has it. And the blood issue, well, I'm having fun with that. You'll have to let me know how I'm doing, because it's gonna linger for a while. Loving the fact that although their minds can't remember, their bodies do when placed under stress. You are the only person who commented on this -- as I'm fairly sure you're referring to Buffy remembering Spike's name -- and I would like to state that you've made me immeasurably happy for it. (Okay, that's a lie, I could measure it. But it's definitely happier than a Ben and Jerry's choco brownie splurge or new comic book day, so be proud!) Really, truly, I'm just trying to play with a disconnect between memory and reaction. I liken it to how sometimes your hand can dial a number on a phone that you've called a lot even if your mind can't remember the numbers. At least, that's happened to me a lot. Cute. ya_lublyu_tebya 06/13/2009 08:33 am Outnumbered Aww, very nice. Lots more revelations to come I'm sure. Of all the things I can assure you, lots more revelations comes high on the list. 06/13/2009 08:30 am Outnumbered I love this premise and can't wait to read more! 06/13/2009 02:18 am Outnumbered good chapter, greaqt characterization, the scene with Giles/Anya and the others in the Magic Box was well done. Characterization is of utmost importance to me, so thanks. I'm also glad people are digging the multi-character scenes and not just focusing on spike and buffy. I'm always nervous people will get bored when I deal with the other characters. :( calminthechaos 06/03/2009 12:37 am Clothes Make the Monster LOVED IT!!!! This is by far my favorite fic on this site! I love the direction your going, I love how you've developed these 'alternate' characters, I just really love every part! Please update soon!~ Wow. Okay, I'm major-league flattered there, because there are many a deserving fic on this site. I hope the fic continues to meet or exceed your expectations. Chapter 5 is giving me hell (I want it to be perfect, really), but it shouldn't take much longer, and I look forward to seeing your assessment on Chapter 4. : ) ya_lublyu_tebya 05/26/2009 11:29 am Clothes Make the Monster Woohhh! Hot! Very glad Randy had the guts to try that. I'm always glad when Randy has the guts to try anything, because he's a very awkward mix of self-conscious and daring. (Which I fully intend to have fun playing with.) Dreylin 05/26/2009 08:28 am Clothes Make the Monster I loved the scene in the clothing store. That last one was great too. I knew I had to get him out of the tweed, but the clothing store scene sort of surprised me. I had a lot of fun writing it. I'm glad you enjoyed it! This plotline continues in a quite amorous direction to the delight of this reader. Love the way they test "familiar"! I hope you continue to follow the plotline. Hopefully you won't be sick of the word 'familiar' before it's all done. Keep me updated on your delight level, whether it grows or falters. They are such sweethearts!! Hope it lasts. His English lilt made her name rich like mocha ice cream, and that did seem familiar This was a very satisfying chapter. From Xander's lonely perspective, to naughty clothes shopping fun, and ending in a (magnificent) kiss. I wonder what will happen when she tries on his real name for size... Thank ye kindly. You won't be wondering long, and I definitely want to know your opinion on how she learns his name. : ) ya_lublyu_tebya 05/26/2009 11:18 am Names and Faces And the awesomeness continues. So many revelations - and not necessarily good ones for poor old Spike. More good and bad revelations to follow - I promise! “BUFFY!?!” she screeched. “You’re making that up!” LOL! I'm particularly proud of the word "screeched" in that line. Verbs add so much to a good line. Oh Anya and Rupert will never live this down. But that was your premise. Feeling sorry for Spike as realizations start to dawn. I believe Rupert can live anything down! But, yeah, I put them in one awkward situation... You'll have to let me know if you continue feeling sorry for Spike. I haven't figured out if he's making out well or poorly so far, and I'm the one writing the story. : ) They are so sweet! jane 05/13/2009 07:06 pm Names and Faces Poor Spike, losing his memory hasn't improved his confidence. Anya and Giles don't seem to be having any problem bonding, interesting. Good update, enjoyed it. I find Spike interesting because, really, I can never tell if he's confident or not. Sure he acts it, and sometimes he seems it, but if you were to strip him down to the essentials, would he be? Guess my interpretation will be known eventually.... 05/13/2009 04:10 pm Names and Faces this fic is shaping up to be utterly AMAZING! hope to read an update soon! Alright! Details in a story that are specific... that actually have meaning and contribute to the plot... Good job! Everything's logical, nothing's forced - not the character's motivations or their feelings or the plot. And nothing's extraneous - it all contributes to the whole. So, now all we need now is the next chapter. And the next. And the next... right up until the end. I don't know where you're going with this, but I sure look forward to finding out. Alright! Details in a story that are specific... that actually have meaning and contribute to the plot... Good job! Everything's logical, nothing's forced - not the character's motivations or their feelings or the plot. And nothing's extraneous - it all contributes to the whole. So, now all we need now is the next chapter. And the next. And the next... right up until the end. I don't know where you're going with this, but I sure look forward to finding out. Thank ye kindly. I'm trying to be compact and coherent, so it's good to know I'm succeeding so far. (I'm sure I'll be second guessing myself at some points.) I'm glad to hear you say you don't know where I'm going with this. I'm hoping this fic is nothing if not original, so hopefully I'll keep my readers guessing (in a good way, of course). Congratulations! You've been rec'd! The Reader's Have Chosen is a new fanfiction recommendation community dedicated to finding the best of the best in fandoms across the boards, and sharing them with other authors and avid readers. Your story, "Randy and Joanie Were Lovers", has been rec'd and is now being voted on in the Monthly Poll Buffy the Vampire Slayer. Fellow fandom-aficionados will vote for their favorites of all the recommendations, and the stories with the most votes will be posted on the front page. You can find our website at (without spaces): http : // thereadershavechosen . eternflame . com You can find the Buffy Weekly Poll at (without spaces): http:// thereadershavechosen. eternflame. com/ forum/ index. php? topic= 550.0 ~Cat I've just started reading this. Nice start. :) Keep reading and responding! It stokes the writing fires. :) ya_lublyu_tebya 05/26/2009 11:10 am Sensory Memory Hah hah, awesome. And I never thought I'd say this, but the smelling was very hot! :-) I now have a swollen head from knowing my fanfic has made someone, somewhere think the line 'the smelling was very hot!' Mission accomplished, I suppose. Now I need to set my goals to new and more bizarre heights! For dressing like a complete dork, you have some great moves. - LOL. Fun story Shell jane 05/02/2009 11:30 am Sensory Memory Great start lots of potential. Looking forward to more. calminthechaos 05/01/2009 03:34 pm Sensory Memory Love it! Please post more!!!! Jelly 05/01/2009 05:29 am Sensory Memory Would love to read more! Jelly 05/01/2009 05:21 am Sensory Memory Would love to read more! Yes! Tabula Rasa is one of my favorite eppies. Great start! readergirrl 04/30/2009 11:44 pm Sensory Memory Lovely, charming, adorable. More, please! 04/30/2009 08:16 pm Sensory Memory OK! cute... | |||
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