Very well written. You maintain the tension well. Characterizations are accurate, and your Arthur comes across as a very real and twisted human being. Good release and light in the conclusion.

That was intense. Good too

I thought this was well done.  The potential for corruption from within an institution which dictates the lives of young women is entirely plausible.  The horror and abuse/creation of vulnerability that could entail is awful but equally feasible.  How 'weak' the drugs would make Buffy plus the horror and fear of the scenario I think makes her inability to fight effectively work.  I wish there were more fics which had the guts to explore some of the potential darker areas of where the darkness of humans can take things.

I DID love it, some minor mistakes are no reason not to enjoy a story and I like this kind of fics, not everything has to be fluff or brooding. I understand that some people feel unconfortable reading this kind of stories but they can always stop at any moment, nobody forces them to read all the fic, right?

When I like a fic I say so and when I dont I just dont review bacause normally I dont like bashing authors because they work hard to entertain us and I also respect the fact that not all the people like the same things I do.

I loved your story, FOR ME It was great, so, yeha, I said it.

Karla

It is completely frustrating when this sort of story is written where you are given all the brutal and graphic details but are left without a satisfactory ending.  This would have worked better for me if we had seen more of Buffy's emotional healing and the evolution of her relationship with Spike instead of 'just tell me you love me' and all is well that ends well.  This left me feeling like I was stabbed and given a corn plaster to fix it.    Sorry, I try not to give negative reviews but sometimes I just have to say what I feel.

CH - I had to leave another review after I saw some of the previous comments.  There aren't very many Horror genre fics here, at least that I've read, so perhaps this came as a surprise to some readers.  Also, writing about rapes is so gut wrenching, it's hard to take, but you certainly warned everyone, so they have no right to complain.

The level of detail you gave to the rapes is completely appropriate for a horror piece and for me is what makes this a strong story. 

I think the story could be improved by showing more of how they got in this situation, more action by Spike (he stands around too much), more efforts by Buffy to find a way out and to fight off her attacker.  She's lost her strength, but she's still a very clever person and very determined.

Also, I wasn't really buying the end where Buffy seems to be over the whole thing after two days in the hospital and that she isn't mortified to see Spike again after him witnessing her total humiliation. 

Anyway, the intense level of detail was great writing.  Looking forward to more stories from you. 

Sadistic violent animal!  I am so glad that Buffy does not regret killing it!  This was very difficult to read with Buffy being a victim like this.  

Wow Chalky that was SCARY

I think you overdid it on the rape scenes. I understand they are what makes the story what it is but it's possible for readers to get the point that it was brutal and horrible without giving us a play by play, you know? A lot can be said in a paragraph or so and I think in cases like this, less is more.  I also agree with others that having Buffy even in the neighborhood of contemplating a future relationship the day after she's finally gotten away from her rapist is extremely unrealistic.

The other reviewers are right, this story bites. In addition to the weaknesses they pointed out, the author forgets that any teenaged girl with a few self defense lessons would have a chance vs this old fart, while a slayer with years of training, & more important, actual life-or-death expereience, wouldn't need to be super girl to beat this idiot like a drum.

Both of my thumbs way, way down.

I think that it would have been a more powerful story if you had heightened the hurt/comfort aspect of the fic rather than trying to turn a brutal and harrowing experience into a romantic happy ending.  I was engaged with the developing bond between two people who are totally dependent on each other for physical and psychological survival, but the ending is wrong footed. 

I'm sorry, but this isn't good. Rape as a subject matter can be done well, but this ain't it.  She suddenly gets happy at the end?  Really? And feeling well enough to contemplate a relationship with Spike? After having been repeatedly raped. Right.