This World That Bleeds by LadyYashka

04/25/2007 03:16 am
Chapter Ten: The Wizard         
ok, now, when are you gonna post more?because I love it so much, please post more
This story will get finished, but I want to rewrite it first. I missed a lot of details that I thought up later. :P

I'm glad you like it and I will finish it.

06/28/2006 02:49 am
Chapter Ten: The Wizard         
Very exciting. This is a great story.

Spikes Slayer2
06/25/2006 05:17 am
Chapter Ten: The Wizard         
ooooh.. its getting very interesting!!!

vladt
06/25/2006 05:13 am
Chapter Ten: The Wizard         
well done. can't wait to see what the last piece is. thanks for the great update.

Lou
06/24/2006 11:49 pm
Chapter Ten: The Wizard         
Great action. Really well done, you covered a lot of ground.

06/24/2006 10:53 pm
Chapter Ten: The Wizard         
he reminds me so much of dru!! another excellent chapter, very well done...can't wait for them all to escape! this story is so fascinating, i'm so sorry to see the update end :(

06/24/2006 08:09 pm
Chapter Ten: The Wizard         
O boy O boy! guna kick some Initiative ass!

Spikes slayer2
06/24/2006 05:06 am
Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked         
gee.. every body is trying to destroy things.. !!!
Yep! What fun would it be if they left anything standing? ;)

vladt
06/23/2006 09:00 pm
Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked         
love the build up. great update, thanks for the read.
Thank you!! I'm glad that you like it.

06/23/2006 02:18 pm
Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked         
wow...the intensity of this update is powerful...very good chapter, bringing everyone together to fight back against the oppressors...but does this mean the story is almost over, because i really hope not!! i love it!
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I was still buzzing from the concert when I wrote it. =D
I don't think this story is anywhere near finished. Maybe just this part. I have lots of ideas for this whole universe. =)

Lou
06/23/2006 02:07 pm
Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked         
Oooh - very exciting. Ready to rock'n'roll!
Yep! Now everything can go boom.( I hope!)

SpaceLord
06/23/2006 01:33 pm
Interlude: No Rest For The Wicked         
I love the story and all the new characters that we meet. Now if I could only keep it straight too. I know Willow is dead but what about Xander? Can't remember anything about him. What about the rest of Angels Team....damn it's hard to keep it straight :)
I'm glad that you like it. =)
How about when I get this part done I post some of the notes I've made? It might help, but I'm just winging this. The story goes where it wants to go.

Spikes Slayer2
06/20/2006 12:59 pm
Chapter 9: Black Sabbath         
what? and who is this person!!!

SpaceLord
06/20/2006 09:03 am
Chapter 9: Black Sabbath         
Hmm so has there been a military coup in the US to allow the Initiative to operate like they do? I mean from what I read they pick up humans too and stick them in these camps.
Yep. It's like those apocoliptic sci-fi movies where the evil military like orgaisation runs everything.Ever seen the movie Tank Girl? Kinda like that.
Hope you like the story though. =)

06/20/2006 06:54 am
Chapter 9: Black Sabbath         
whoa...wonder what the "event" is gonna be...love how you brought giles into it...i feel so bad for the poor prisoners, all of them...and "william" and buffy are starting to bond, even if it's silently...another excellent chapter :)

vladt
06/20/2006 04:56 am
Chapter 9: Black Sabbath         
good update. looks like confrontation is going to happen soon. thanks for the fun.

06/20/2006 04:22 am
Chapter 9: Black Sabbath         
:happy:

nmcil
06/19/2006 01:22 am
Chapter 8: Serenity         
Wonderful new chapters and intro of new characters - much thanks for the quick updates -

06/18/2006 01:33 pm
Chapter 8: Serenity         
Terrific. I need more!

Spikes Slayer2
06/18/2006 05:09 am
Chapter 8: Serenity         
great 2 chapters.. i love how you are retelling all of the past events.. very nice.. :)

06/17/2006 07:53 pm
Chapter 8: Serenity         
More!!!!

vladt
06/17/2006 07:25 pm
Chapter 8: Serenity         
very good read. thanks love the ending of the chapter.

Lou
06/17/2006 06:52 pm
Chapter 8: Serenity         
Great adventure - and nicely done with all the back stories.

SpaceLord
06/17/2006 03:22 pm
Chapter 8: Serenity         
Well this story sure has a nice start....I'm with Kelly about killing them all....that is the way to go

06/17/2006 03:07 pm
Chapter 8: Serenity         
wow...powerful chapter...you're developing each and every character so well...perfectly done and as always i cant wait for more :)

06/17/2006 02:52 pm
Chapter 8: Serenity         
Excellent chapter! I like the way you are handling all of these parallel lines of activities. Great job.
To Everyone:
I'm SO glad that you guys liked that last chapter. I felt like I'd have better luck banging my head against my desk than actually getting the chapter finished. I am working on chapter nine. so hopefully this one will come out easier than the last. Thank you for the reviews!! =)

06/21/2006 08:24 pm
Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave         
So glad Willow and Oz found Kelly and she's not dead. Great story.

vladt
06/17/2006 07:20 pm
Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave         
nice to see you brought kelly back, even if, sadly. thanks for the read.

06/16/2006 08:22 pm
Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave         
Nice connection- very neat. And I love that you've tied Oz into the story too, though the willow part made me choke up a little. Can't wait to read more of this- it's incredible :]] Truly unique my dear.

Missus_grace
06/16/2006 06:47 pm
Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave         
I just discovered this story and I'm glad I jumped in and started reading. Very interesting plot and backstories.

I can't wait to see the rebels crush the Initiative, but I'm sorry that Riley's already dead. I would have enjoyed watching Buffy beat on his traitorous a*s!

Pin
06/16/2006 02:22 pm
Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave         
Another excellent chapter. I really like your new characters and the way you are placing all of the players on the board. Looking forward to more.
I'm really glad you are enjoying this story. Don't worry though, chapter eight has already been started. (228 words so far) ;)

06/16/2006 02:14 pm
Chapter Seven: Children Of The Grave         
oh wow...so kelly's all right!! awesome!!! you see, you've made me care so much about an oc you've only just introduced! you are an excellent writer, i can't believe i've never read your stuff before!! very very good story! :) can't wait for more
I just couldn't leave her. ;)
The last story I wrote,before posting here,was sometime in 2001/2002. I posted them to mailing list I'm on. After getting little to no responses I just quit. I couldn't even tell if they were being read. (btw-I really like that feature here)It took me awhile to get the nerve up to try again. I'm glad I did. =)

06/21/2006 08:17 pm
Chapter: 6 Awake         
Aw, I love Fred! Good girl.

vladt
06/17/2006 06:37 pm
Chapter: 6 Awake         
fred is a wonderful addition to your cabal. thanks for the fun read.

06/16/2006 08:18 pm
Chapter: 6 Awake         
I love the introduction of Fred! Pure genius!!

Spikes Slayer2
06/16/2006 08:28 am
Chapter: 6 Awake         
arrghh fred is a little devious one isnt she.. :)

06/16/2006 01:20 am
Chapter: 6 Awake         
Man! Lol, Is everyone that works there out to take it down? lol. So loven it!
You will just have to wait and see. ;)

Dreylin
06/15/2006 04:35 pm
Chapter: 6 Awake         
Fred! Fabulous addition to the story.
Thanks! I hope you will like the other's I'm throwing in as well. =)

Pin
06/15/2006 02:59 pm
Chapter: 6 Awake         
I love the way you are building your community of rebels. Each one has his or her own story and reason for fighting. Great concept and you are doing a really nice job of creating this world. Looking forward to more.
Thank you! These kind words help me keep writing. Which is a good thing since this story has taken on a life all it's own. =)

06/15/2006 02:58 pm
Chapter: 6 Awake         
oh i'm so glad you put fred in this story!! it's perfect...she's the perfect good doctor undercover in this nazi-like setting...loving this fic more with every chapter...can't wait for more :)
Thanks! I truly hadn't thought of using her until I wrote that. I just wanted a worker who was sympathetic. Then Fred showed up. I’m glad she did too. ;)
::off to finish next chapter:::

vladt
06/17/2006 06:32 pm
Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath         
building an impressive cast of characters. thanks for the read.

06/16/2006 08:16 pm
Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath         
I love the sense of forboding attatched to each of the character's desires for revenge- it really creates a feeling of anticipation. Can't wait to see this operation TAKEN DOWN.

06/14/2006 11:54 pm
Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath         
I can see now this is going to one ell of a story cant wait for an update

Pin
06/14/2006 06:57 pm
Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath         
This is a really fascinating story and I love the array of new characters you've created. Your version of this AU is defnitely interesting and I'm looking forward to more. Thanks!

Syl
06/14/2006 05:44 pm
Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath         
This is amazing! I am just loving it--please update quickly (keeping fingers tightly crossed!).

06/14/2006 02:46 pm
Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath         
this just gets better and better..you're weaving this intricate web of characters and siituations that i know will be very important as the story progresses...i am thoroughly enjoying this and cant wait for more :)

Spikes Slayer2
06/14/2006 01:39 pm
Chapter 5: Sabbath Bloody Sabbath         
arrghh!! please update!! i love this!!

06/21/2006 08:05 pm
Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky         
These people are horrible! Geez, Kelly was just a little girl. I hope she didn't die from the blow to her head. And Tara's father is a first class asshole.

vladt
06/17/2006 06:27 pm
Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky         
very good update, describing a very disturbing world (or parts of ours.) thanks for the fine read.

06/16/2006 08:09 pm
Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky         
Ugh- how terrible! This world gets a little more devestating at every turn. These soldiers are inhumane at best :[ Fantastically gripping story.

06/14/2006 02:43 pm
Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky         
oh how horrible...you have created a truly horrific yet fascinating world here...love reading this fic...!!! :)cant wait for more :)

katakata
06/14/2006 09:32 am
Chapter 4: Hole In The Sky         
Interesting world you've outlined here - can't wait to see more of it. Well done on some pretty enticing OCs as well (I'm especially interested in finding out Trey's backstory).

04/25/2007 03:10 am
Chapter 3: Changes         
Oh Boy.....I have to read faster....
:)

06/21/2006 07:58 pm
Chapter 3: Changes         
Very original story. I'm enjoying it so far.

vladt
06/17/2006 08:23 am
Chapter 3: Changes         
sorry to see dru exit this tale so soon. always had asoft spot for dru. not to the point. excellent tale, thanks for the read.

06/16/2006 08:06 pm
Chapter 3: Changes         
Icredible. I really really like this story; your back-story to William is both intriguing and cause for an even more terrifying vampire. This is wonderful.

Lou
06/16/2006 01:11 am
Chapter 3: Changes         
Intriguing.

06/14/2006 01:41 am
Chapter 3: Changes         
oh this is *so* good!! i'm loving this story...you actually brought me to tears for *dru*...so that's saying something! :) excellent story, i'm now officially hooked :) can't wait for more :)
COOL! I was worried about that part. Dru is not easy to write. I was shooting for decent when writing her. Besides, it's only fair I made you cry. Your stories have made me cry many times. =)

dragontiff
06/14/2006 01:34 am
Chapter 3: Changes         
great story. i cant wait for more updates
Thank You!!

04/25/2007 03:08 am
Chapter 2: Sweet Leaf         
Shit, I sooooooooooo love this story sweetie.
Cool! Glad you like it. :)

vladt
06/17/2006 08:02 am
Chapter 2: Sweet Leaf         
very good read and another intresting character (leaf). thanks for the fun read.

06/16/2006 08:01 pm
Chapter 2: Sweet Leaf         
*shivers* oh boy, this is SO good :]]

06/14/2006 01:33 am
Chapter 2: Sweet Leaf         
whoa....tara?? interesting chapter...i love your oc's, very believable and engaging...i'm hooked on this story already :)
Yep! I always liked her and Joss had her killed. Glad I got you hooked!

04/25/2007 03:07 am
Chapter 1: Immune         
oh Holy Mary....this is weird but interesting....mmmmmm, now I am more curious.
Weird yes...I blame this on listening to Black Sabbath. :D

vladt
06/17/2006 07:52 am
Chapter 1: Immune         
love the crptic trey. can't wait to see what "So many lies spinning in head. It is important to clear spider webs before becoming to big," means. very entertaining read, thank you

06/16/2006 07:48 pm
Chapter 1: Immune         
About to get very interesting indeed, I'm sure. This is an incredible work- can't wait to see where you'll take the 'William' character :]] Nice one.

06/14/2006 01:30 am
Chapter 1: Immune         
wow...this is intense, and fascinating so far...reminds me very much of holocaust stories i've read...trey reminds me of a male dru sort of...excellent chatper :)
Thanks! I have plans for Trey. Just haven't got any of them ironed out yet. ;)

nmcil
06/13/2006 07:57 pm
Chapter 1: Immune         
Love your intro - powerful lyrics and a really good intro for your piece - I look forward to reading the work. Please Please Please don't let this work join the ranks of the "abandoned" FF - Really like your sparse structure - your language gives the impact and very good descriptive quality that draws me into wanting to know more about them straight-away.

Good Luck with your work -
Thank you!!!! I promise not to abandon this story. That is one of my pet peves. I hate finding a really good story only to have it abandoned.

04/25/2007 02:57 am
Prologue: War Pigs         
Good start, on my way to read more of this story :)
Glad you liked it so far.

vladt
06/17/2006 07:42 am
Prologue: War Pigs         
"How could she have been so blind?" that is rhetorical? very good beginning, thanks for the read.

06/16/2006 07:35 pm
Prologue: War Pigs         
Wonderful start- Great narrative hook. I'm so gripped!

06/13/2006 07:06 am
Prologue: War Pigs         
interesting intro...wonder where you're going with this...can't wait to see :)
Thanks! I did post the first chapter at the same time as the prologue but it's not up yet. The second was just posted now. So hopefully they will show up. =)