I love your ending line - it's like their entire relationship condensed down to 21 lines -

 

I imagine pent up need is a hard one to write.  You have to buid it up just so and you succeeded very well.

So cruel, but so much kinder than what made it to screen. And I love that last line.

I like that Xander commented on Willow’s magic use and didn’t back down from her anger. I love how much nicer Buffy and Spike’s first time together went, the lack of violence was nice and even though she said it was wrong her explanation was because she didn’t love him and she stayed after giving it.

i hopethings go better this time round

You did a wonderful job with this one. I loved it. ; ) And it was much better than the original episode. Looking forward to more.

love it! I hope buffy doesn't screw it up though.

very good read, thank you. i don't think buffy believes her own words.

Loved the rewrite. Having their first time without violence was a wonderful, unexpected surprise. I don't know how anyone can write a love scene, just glad that they do, and you did a wonderful job, especially with their relationship being where it was at that point. The fact that she had to remind him that she didn't love him, is pretty irrelevant. She didn't love Parker or Riley either. You had Spike say it best "so long as she let him love her". It was more than the crumb that he'd wanted. Glad to see that Xander's letting Willow know just what he thinks of her use of magic. I liKe that Spike's being included in the scoobie's research. Both he and Anya have always had more knowledge of demons then they were given credit for, or that knowledge utitized. So happy that more are in the works, thanks for this great update. *hugs*

So this is their new first time....definitely gentler! Buffy logic doesn't make sense...she makes sure to spout all these things, then does the opposite anyway. What's the point of your words, Buffy, when your actions always betray them?

Poor Spike's always getting used...but maybe it won't get brutal this time.

Still loving how Xander has a brain here. And a backbone, and a not nearly so cruel mouth.

Interesting how having Joyce around still isn't doing much to change things from Buffy's perspective...

Might have been tough (sex scenes and fight scenes are never easy IMHO) but so well done! I really enjoyed this take on Smashed....on the whole season for that matter. Excellent update.

Kathleen

I know it's sad, that she's using him, but still, that was just beautiful. And I didn't find myself talking to the computer screen, yelling at Buffy and Spike to quit being such jerks like I did watching the sixth season, so major loveliness there. Don't be nervous, we're hooked, in it for the long haul, "We'll see it through, that's what we're always here to do." And all that rot. Love this story!

Well, this is a more promising start than they got in the show, at least. Can't wait to see more.

This was good. I cheered when Xander confronted Willow over using magic to type instead of her hands. Buffy and Spike's first time being sad and gentle instead of violent and ugly is great. In fact the whole chapter was a delight and I can't wait for the rest.

you wrote that incredibly well...and the end was just heartbreaking...poor spike...and he just accepts her using him....*sigh*...i hope it gets better, though...