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More Toil and Trouble by slaymesoftly 09/01/2014 04:47 pm This fic contains the best interplay of words between Spike and Buffy and I'm totally enjoying it! I'm so glad. Thanks for telling me so. :) 08/31/2014 07:58 pm Great follow-up. Can't wait for more :) However, there's something wrong with the formatting - all the chapter is in bold, and when you move the mouse cursor over the text it gets underlined. I've seen it in some other authors' stories on the site... I have a question about sentence "Do you really want to remind of that?" Shouldn't it be "remind me"? You've also missed a few commas, e.g. in the 2 last paragraphs - "No we're not." "And yes we are." There's more, but the strange formatting makes it impossible to copy and paste :(. Anyway, hope you can help it somehow... The story is developing really nicely and it seems to have all the things I like so much in your fics. :) Thanks for the heads-up. I think I fixed the formatting (and inserted the missing "me"). It looks ok in preview, so I hope whatever went wrong the first time fixed itself. Re the missing commas: when you are using the "yes" or "no" as part of a phrase, not as an interjection, (no pause), the comma isnt necessary. (CMoS 6.39) In fact I actually took another one out that shouldn't have been there. Didn't do a complete careful reread, though, so don't know where the other missing ones might be. Maybe I'll catch them later today if I get time to look it over again. :) 08/31/2014 12:32 pm Now then, what's going to happen between Buffy & Riley/The Initiative? Always loved the budding friendship between Joyce & Spike. They both benefitted from a sympathetic ear and some adult conversation. More please... More soon. Thanks for reading! 08/31/2014 07:44 am I really like this story so far and I can't wait for more. The Joyce Spike interaction/friendship is always welcome and confused Buffy is amusing as well. Keep up the great work...like you always do. Thanks. I hope you like the rest of it. :) | |||
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