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Storm Warning by Lilachigh
Chapter: Chp 2 Eye of the Storm
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05/30/2010 05:56 pm
07/25/2007 05:36 am
God I hate Riley. Selfish bastard. Tell me you'll have some nasty demon munch on him? That would be fantastic lol
07/13/2007 06:21 am
i hate riley. i want spike to eat him.
07/13/2007 05:39 am
i hate riley. i want spike to eat him.
06/13/2007 02:48 pm
Nice one, Riley -- always put your own needs first!
06/11/2007 08:53 pm
oh man something tells me that dawn might end up in trouble here...spike is actually very good for buffy in this situation, it's just hard for her to see it right now...great chapter, love :)
Thank you. Not a lot of readers but those who are reading seem to be enjoying it. Thank goodness!
06/11/2007 07:07 pm
Great update! I can't wait to see where you go with this!
Thank you. Chp 3 coming shortly.
06/11/2007 06:20 am
fine read, thank you. riley always was such a class act. not only does he ignore the note, but slams the door on the way out.
The sad thing is that if he was told, he’d be sorry. But he doesn’t see it first. He is a very self-centred character, not actually selfish.
B
06/11/2007 12:03 am
Really really enjoying this, just read first two chapters together and they are both very well done. Love season 5 fics, and this is very well written.
Cannot wait to see what happens.
Only one tiny tiny critism, I know you are explaining when you change scenes, eg. 'Back at Revello...', but an extra line break or something would be helpful to, as I found it a bit jarring to suddenly change scenes, without a break. It's probably only me and don't need to listen, but just a suggestion. I think it's the way I read that I'm already onto the next few paragraphs whilst I'm processing one, and it jarred me out of the story when I realised the scene was changing. Just a extra blank line would be enough to stop that, but it is up to you.
Anyhow, apart from that, loving this fic so far, keep it up! :)
Cannot wait to see what happens.
Only one tiny tiny critism, I know you are explaining when you change scenes, eg. 'Back at Revello...', but an extra line break or something would be helpful to, as I found it a bit jarring to suddenly change scenes, without a break. It's probably only me and don't need to listen, but just a suggestion. I think it's the way I read that I'm already onto the next few paragraphs whilst I'm processing one, and it jarred me out of the story when I realised the scene was changing. Just a extra blank line would be enough to stop that, but it is up to you.
Anyhow, apart from that, loving this fic so far, keep it up! :)
thanks for your kind comments and glad you are enjoying the story.
I do see what you mean about the spacing in the text. I’ll certainly try and add a line but sometimes I have difficulty in making the text stay in paragraphs at all, let alone altering them!
I do see what you mean about the spacing in the text. I’ll certainly try and add a line but sometimes I have difficulty in making the text stay in paragraphs at all, let alone altering them!
06/10/2007 11:43 pm
The dialogue between Spike and Buffy was wonderful, I just love how the two blondes interact with each other. Great chapter!
Appreciate your remarks a lot. Does help to motivate me to write more.
06/10/2007 10:58 pm
Uh oh, Riley going to cause trouble. Nice realistic play between Spike and Buffy, btw. Very true to character.
thank you very much for taking the time and trouble to review.
scarlett2u
06/10/2007 10:32 pm
Just read the first two chapters back-to-back and am enjoying every word. Great characterization and voice. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Thanks!
Thanks!
thank you so much. Chp 3 should be posted very soon.
06/10/2007 08:50 pm
Stoopid Riley!! Poor Dawn, all alone at home and with a storm...
thank you for reviewing. Yes, Dawn could make things far worse for everyone!
06/10/2007 08:43 pm
Thank you Mr. Responsibility Riley. Yeah, Dawn isn't a little kid, but waking up alone during a storm when she knows what is out there has got to be scary.
It’s a thin dividing line, isn’t it? Yes Dawn is old enough to stay in house on her own, but in some ways she is very young.
06/10/2007 08:31 pm
Oh oh.......methinks trouble is coming in that storm. Riley will go off on Spike and Dawn is a loose canon for certain.
Excellent update.
Kathleen
Excellent update.
Kathleen
Yes, Dawn is definitely going to cause trouble.
06/10/2007 07:55 pm
Oh that was good, more please.
I wonder where Riley will go and if he will find them.
I hope Spike gets her to relax.
I wonder where Riley will go and if he will find them.
I hope Spike gets her to relax.
I don’t know if Spike and relax are compatible words! Thank you for reviewing.
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