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Borrowed Time by msclawdia
Chapter: Gone
Grin. :-)
06/06/2010 01:18 pm
06/14/2009 06:11 pm
What stands out in this chapter is that Anya can really think of something other than her orgasms when she's having sex!
10/27/2008 08:36 pm
Dear Ms. Clawdia,
I find myself re-reading your stories this week, and I am in awe. The balance between dialogue and internal musing is perfect. The character voices are wonderful, and your subtle deviations (from the canon! what did you think I meant?) are inspired. There are things in this chapter that have stuck with me for a long time:
1. Xander's perceptiveness without over-reaction ("Buffy's boning Spike.")
2. Joyce's serious talk with Buffy about "taking advantage of a man's feelings"
3. Buffy's revelations of her life expectations, so different from "normal"
Anyway, I wanted you to know how much your efforts are appreciated. Everything I've read from you has been a standout. "Reflections" is another one I go back to often. Do you plan to post "Restoration" here? I think you should, even if it's from a post-Spike perspective.
Thanks for all the great stories!
Warm regards,
Rebcake
I find myself re-reading your stories this week, and I am in awe. The balance between dialogue and internal musing is perfect. The character voices are wonderful, and your subtle deviations (from the canon! what did you think I meant?) are inspired. There are things in this chapter that have stuck with me for a long time:
1. Xander's perceptiveness without over-reaction ("Buffy's boning Spike.")
2. Joyce's serious talk with Buffy about "taking advantage of a man's feelings"
3. Buffy's revelations of her life expectations, so different from "normal"
Anyway, I wanted you to know how much your efforts are appreciated. Everything I've read from you has been a standout. "Reflections" is another one I go back to often. Do you plan to post "Restoration" here? I think you should, even if it's from a post-Spike perspective.
Thanks for all the great stories!
Warm regards,
Rebcake
10/27/2008 08:33 pm
Dear Ms. Clawdia,
I find myself re-reading your stories this week, and I am in awe. The balance between dialogue and internal musing is perfect. The character voices are wonderful, and your subtle deviations (from the canon! what did you think I meant?) are inspired. There are things in this chapter that have stuck with me for a long time:
1. Xander's perceptiveness without over-reaction ("Buffy's boning Spike.")
2. Joyce's serious talk with Buffy about "taking advantage of a man's feelings"
3. Buffy's revelations of her life expectations, so different from "normal"
Anyway, I wanted you to know how much your efforts are appreciated. Everything I've read from you has been a standout. "Reflections" is another one I go back to often. Do you plan to post "Restoration" here? I think you should, even if it's from a post-Spike perspective.
Thanks for all the great stories!
Warm regards,
Rebcake
I find myself re-reading your stories this week, and I am in awe. The balance between dialogue and internal musing is perfect. The character voices are wonderful, and your subtle deviations (from the canon! what did you think I meant?) are inspired. There are things in this chapter that have stuck with me for a long time:
1. Xander's perceptiveness without over-reaction ("Buffy's boning Spike.")
2. Joyce's serious talk with Buffy about "taking advantage of a man's feelings"
3. Buffy's revelations of her life expectations, so different from "normal"
Anyway, I wanted you to know how much your efforts are appreciated. Everything I've read from you has been a standout. "Reflections" is another one I go back to often. Do you plan to post "Restoration" here? I think you should, even if it's from a post-Spike perspective.
Thanks for all the great stories!
Warm regards,
Rebcake
Thank you so much! I'm so glad you've enjoyed reading my stories, and I always love getting feedback.
The only reason I haven't posted Restoration here is because it's a non-vampire Spike story. I suppose I could ask the mods about it and see what they think.
Thanks again,
MsClawdia
The only reason I haven't posted Restoration here is because it's a non-vampire Spike story. I suppose I could ask the mods about it and see what they think.
Thanks again,
MsClawdia
Cas
01/21/2007 04:29 am
Still loving Joyce - and Anya too LOL. Really, all your characters are so much nicer than usually portrayed. It's refreshing.
Thank you! Anya and Dawn might well have been my favorite characters to write in this story. I'm so glad you're enjoying it, and I really appreciate all the feedback!
10/30/2006 02:44 pm
nice! like xanders reaction and joyce's comments
Thanks! It always drove me nuts that canon Xander didn't make the connection, and here was my chance to fix it :)
10/29/2006 09:10 am
I am enjoying this nicer, far more honest Buffy and not so clueless Xander. I love that Buffy acknowledged Spike when he told her that he loved her and didn’t deny it or throw it back in his face. I liked Buffy’s talk with her mom and Joyce asking her how fair things were for Spike, I also liked that Buffy pointed out a few truths about herself.
Thanks. I prefer my Xander as the guy who sees things. And Buffy acting like an adult.
10/09/2006 10:30 pm
great chapter. loved logical buffy, anya is a joy. thanks for the fun read.
missus_grace
10/01/2006 08:08 am
Just now getting caught up on all the chapters. It's a great read! I loved Buffy's talk with Joyce. They both seem true to character, and what Buffy said makes perfect sense.
Thanks. Glad you're enjoying it. Staying true to the characters was a bit goal for me in this fic.
09/29/2006 04:23 am
just love it. It was great to see Buffy just having a good time at least for a while with Spike. And go her and Dawn ganging up on Joyce. I am glad that Joyce is a balancing feature for Buffy and Spike.
Thanks! Yes, I am really aiming for a less dark relationship than what we saw in canon.
Emilee
09/28/2006 05:20 pm
I was hesitant to read this because of the character death warning, but I am impressed so far. Having her mother there really seems to be helping Buffy. And the relationship with Spike is going much nicer. I think it's funny having Xander figure out the inviso-sex thing, because really, on the show he was BLIND, although now I worry about an intervention. I really hope there is a spuffy end to this, and the character death isn't Buffy or Spike, but I don't know how close you're staying to Canon. I also am looking forward to your rewrite of As You Were and the following train wreck. I sincerely hope that it will be better than the show was, although you'd have to try very hard to make it worse. Anyway, loving the story more than I expected to. Can't wait for the next update
So glad you decided to give it a try, and thanks for reviewing. Riley will be popping up, but things will... proceed differently than on the show. You'll just have to keep reading ;)
pretty_in_fangs
09/28/2006 04:32 pm
Funfun. (:
Poor Joyce.
Poor Joyce.
Thanks!
kim
09/28/2006 03:10 am
Ah, good...they had the "not normal" conversation. It really does take a lot of pressure off Buffy if Joyce realizes her daughter has a different future than most. She wants to put the wedding and baby hopes on someone, put them on Dawn, and just encourage Buffy to be happy.
Love Anya's thinking...it's nice to have someone not delude themselves.
Buffy still being nicer to Spike - very good.
Willow and Buffy talking - good.
Can I put my request in now for the Trio to die, and not Joyce or Tara?
Love Anya's thinking...it's nice to have someone not delude themselves.
Buffy still being nicer to Spike - very good.
Willow and Buffy talking - good.
Can I put my request in now for the Trio to die, and not Joyce or Tara?
That doesn't mean Joyce is going to stop hoping. I know if someone told me that my daughter might not live past 25, I'd be all 'the hell you say.'
There will be character death(s), hence the warning. But no spoilers :)
Thanks for reviewing!
Emily
09/28/2006 12:55 am
What a fun little chapter! Although it was obviously not purely fluff, it was very enjoyable and put a smile on my face. I just looovveed the line: "Lonely 'cause I love you". It was very touching, especially since she was physically there with him etc. etc. Really super chapter. I also like how Joyce is the differing factor from S6 and this story; and she isn't present in the story loads, but has still affected the outcome greatly. Can't wait for more:)
Thanks! I'm so glad that line didn't come off too shmoopy. I really want to show the two of them starting to open up to each other.
I hope to have the 'more' ready soon.
09/27/2006 11:54 pm
hehehehehe I like this chapter, and that Joyce's main concern is that Buffy will hurt Spike's feelings. heh. And I love the anya stuff at the end. very nice. Can't wait for more.
Also, thanks for Letting Xander figure it out. I thought it was totally lame on the show and he was completely denial-xander. he HAD to know what was going on. you know what sex looks like when you walk in on it and he knew buffy was invisible...there is NO freaking way Xander could not have known. To me that's always been one of the most unbelievable things that happened on that show, and that's saying something.
I like that you are redoing the whole season pretty much and keeping a lot, but changing a lot too.
Also, thanks for Letting Xander figure it out. I thought it was totally lame on the show and he was completely denial-xander. he HAD to know what was going on. you know what sex looks like when you walk in on it and he knew buffy was invisible...there is NO freaking way Xander could not have known. To me that's always been one of the most unbelievable things that happened on that show, and that's saying something.
I like that you are redoing the whole season pretty much and keeping a lot, but changing a lot too.
Sometimes it's hard to decide what to toss and what to keep. A lot of external events will stay the same because (excuse me if I'm repeating), Joyce being alive isn't going to change the Trio making an invisibility ray. But the title of the next chapter will not be 'The DMP' I'm trying to make it so that a lot of things that are a little different add up to a big difference in the end.
I'm glad people are liking the Anya POV. She and Dawn might be the most fun to write. And yes, Denial Xander had to go. I like Observo-Xander, so that's what my readers are getting :)
09/27/2006 11:06 pm
lol...that last little bit from anya's perspective was classic...great job on this chapter...i'm glad joyce told buffy how unfair she was being to spike...so buffy can see that her concerns are not *only* for her in this situation...and that spike deserves to be treated with respect....i'm looking forward to your next chapter, pet...this one was great :)
Glad you enjoyed the Anya bit. I had a blast writing it. We'll have to agree to disagree on how fair Buffy's being :) She's being honest with him, at least. But she is keeping it a secret (or thinks she is), which isn't so good.
09/27/2006 11:04 pm
Great chapter. Love it that Buffy's feeling more confident in her relationship with Spike and asking her mom about inviting Spike over. I understand that Joyce only wants a normal life for her girl but normal isn't what Buffy is, and the sooner that her mom understands that the better it will be for Buffy and Spike. now that this Xander knows that she and Spike are "together" maybe they'll accept their relationship alot easier. This is a wonderful rewrite. update soon, thanks for the read.
Thanks so much! I think the 'how normal can she be?' question is one worth looking at, and that's part of what I'm trying to do with this story (even if the answer ends up muddy).
Fnagfaceandrea
09/27/2006 10:38 pm
I loved the story so far but i think this is the best chapter yet. Of course now i want to know what Joyce will do about chritmas and i love the fact that Xander knows and Is not reacting badly yet.
again I say,Really really good re-telling of season 6
again I say,Really really good re-telling of season 6
Thanks! I really had a lot of fun writing this one. I hope to have chapter eleven out soon, which will be the Christmas-timeframe chapter.
Tamara
09/27/2006 10:12 pm
I like how part of Joyce's concern is about Spike. And good on having Xander real;ize that Buffy was with Spike. It always seemed so dumb that he ewither didn't realize it or didn't want to realize it in canon.
I think canon Xander had a serious mental block on. One of several things that will be different with my Xander. Thanks for reviewing!
margaret
09/27/2006 08:23 pm
great chapter, you're doing a fantastic job of rewriting the season, and you have all the characters down perfectly. i always wished buffy could have more support for everything that season
Thanks! I'm really trying very hard to stay true to the characters.
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